TITLE: NOOKS & GRANNIES
GENRE: Humorous Paranormal
Original critique on MSFV
NOOKS & GRANNIES reveals childhood friends Keegan and Amelia as the late-bloomers they are--accepting their respective quirks and his homosexuality--while coping with ghostly whispers and levitating objects in Keegan's grandmother’s house. Comfortable with their misfit status, they now must learn how to react when two young men come along to shake up their mostly reclusive lives.
Logline Revision Critiques #9
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Logline Revision Critiques #8
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October 12, 2012
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TITLE: Through the Edgewood
GENRE: MG Fantasy Adventure
Original critique on MSFV
When 11 year-old Izzy's little sister is kidnapped by a faerie queen, she teams up with a band of orphan Changelings to rescue her. If Izzy fails, both her sister and the Changelings will end up as ingredients in the queen's youth elixir.
GENRE: MG Fantasy Adventure
Original critique on MSFV
When 11 year-old Izzy's little sister is kidnapped by a faerie queen, she teams up with a band of orphan Changelings to rescue her. If Izzy fails, both her sister and the Changelings will end up as ingredients in the queen's youth elixir.
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Logline Revision Critiques #7
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TITLE: Beyond Chains and Stars
When twins Chosi and Juhan are stolen from their home world and sold into slavery, they vow to return home. But with Chosi in the gladiator arena and her brother sold into political intrigue, keeping that vow might kill them.
GENRE: YA Sci-Fi
When twins Chosi and Juhan are stolen from their home world and sold into slavery, they vow to return home. But with Chosi in the gladiator arena and her brother sold into political intrigue, keeping that vow might kill them.
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Logline Revision Critiques #6
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TITLE: Elemental Fire
GENRE: Upper MG Fantasy
Original critique on MSFV
Revised logline:
Grieving fourteen-year-old Brook discovers a gate to another world and inadvertently carries the gate key to the hub world of Tirasvara. Merrick, a stranded madman, seeks the key to control travel between Tirasvara and parallel Earths. Merrick’s plans would destroy all existing gates. If Brook doesn’t return it to her own world, while fighting the temptation use the key to flee to a world where her mother still lives, she’ll cause the same destruction.
Alternate format:
When fourteen-year-old Brook follows her physicist father though a gate to the world of Tirasvara, she discovers a plot to alter the physical laws governing travel between parallel worlds. If she can’t stop a madman determined to control access to all worlds, physical disasters will reverberate through her world and destroy her gateway home.
GENRE: Upper MG Fantasy
Original critique on MSFV
Revised logline:
Grieving fourteen-year-old Brook discovers a gate to another world and inadvertently carries the gate key to the hub world of Tirasvara. Merrick, a stranded madman, seeks the key to control travel between Tirasvara and parallel Earths. Merrick’s plans would destroy all existing gates. If Brook doesn’t return it to her own world, while fighting the temptation use the key to flee to a world where her mother still lives, she’ll cause the same destruction.
Alternate format:
When fourteen-year-old Brook follows her physicist father though a gate to the world of Tirasvara, she discovers a plot to alter the physical laws governing travel between parallel worlds. If she can’t stop a madman determined to control access to all worlds, physical disasters will reverberate through her world and destroy her gateway home.
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Logline Revision Critiques #5
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TITLE: Dias de los Muertos: Days of the Dead
GENRE: Middle Grade
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Logline Revision Critiques #4
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TITLE: The Withering of Amblethorn
GENRE: YA Science Fiction
Original critique on MSFV
GENRE: YA Science Fiction
Original critique on MSFV
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girls of an exclusive New England school are disappearing only to be
returned aged beyond recognition. When authorities brush the case aside
two unlikely friends, school outcast Vera and social butterfly Peyton,
team up to figure out who-or what- is behind it.
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Title: Running Down the Dragon
Genre: Adult Thriller/Fantasy
Thalia
Drake of the U.S. Military's elite shapeshifter forces, and the world's
last dragon, must stop a serial killer whose ultimate goal is
exterminating shapeshifters. But stopping him means exposing the deadly
secret she's hidden for thousands of years - her true identity.
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